My #1 concern is getting out of the house in time to go to Starbucks, lol. I know there is no way I will fall asleep before midnight and I have to get up at 6.
pre-baby I'd fall asleep at 11ish, hit my snooze button a million times in the morning and get out of bed and shower 30 minutes before I had to go.
Your edits look great! FWIW, my DCP told me to write down EVERYTHING and not to feel crazy about it, lol. She said some moms come in with 2 pages worth of info and some come in with a few bullet points for eating and sleeping.
I sent in info similar to your first draft, but very brief bullets instead. They said it was helpful so I don't feel crazy anymore!
Your edits look great! I was worried about getting out of the house on time the first time as well. Try to give yourself a few extra minutes so you can give her a cuddle and stuff without having to just run out the door! I just made sure to have everything ready the night before, it wasn't as bad as I thought it was going to be.