Check my grammar.

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Would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. So nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

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Sept 30, 2013 20:56:00 GMT -5 @cse1960 said:

I cannot tell what it is you are trying to do.

We have an English Professor in our playdate circle.  I don't want to make a mistake on my email. 

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Sept 30, 2013 20:58:06 GMT -5 @imback said:

Sept 30, 2013 20:56:00 GMT -5 @cse1960 said:

I cannot tell what it is you are trying to do.

We have an English Professor in our playdate circle.  I don't want to make a mistake on my email. 

I think she means the point of the e-mail. It's kind of confusing.

[kaybee85]

I would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. It was so nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times, and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I would be happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

[snipsnsnails]

Sept 30, 2013 20:54:53 GMT -5 @imback said:

Would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. So nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

It was so nice to meet you all. I'd love to start regular Friday playdates. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S before quite a few times. I'd love for him and his mom (or nanny) to come this Friday. I'm happy to send them an e-mail or if you'd like to send it, P, let me know.

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Sept 30, 2013 21:00:23 GMT -5 kaybee85 said:

I would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. It was so nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times, and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I would be happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

Thank you!

[rugbywife]

Sept 30, 2013 20:54:53 GMT -5 @imback said:

Would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. So nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

I wouldn't start an email with 'Would'.

How about:

It was so nice to meet all of you. I would love to make Friday playdates a regular event and this Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to invite him and his nanny, or mother, to come to this week's play date.  Let me know if you would like me to send the email, or if you would rather do so. 

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Sept 30, 2013 20:54:53 GMT -5 @imback said:

Would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. So nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

I would love to make Friday play dates a regular event! It was so nice to meet you all. (This chunk is fine...) I'd be happy to forward the email, or P, if you'd like to you could send it. Just let me know!

[ProfessorArtNerd]

Um, in my experience, English professors have no better grasp on grammar than the general population. Sorrynotsorry

[sonrisa]

Sept 30, 2013 20:54:53 GMT -5 @imback said:

Would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. So nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

I would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. [your sentence lacks a subject for the verb "would love"]

So nice to meet you all. [This sentence fragment lacks a subject and a verb]

E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. [This sentence is long. You might consider breaking it down into two sentences. The multiple ands and ors makes it a bit hard to follow - ie. it looks like something I might write. lol.]

I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to, P, you could send it. [P's name should be set off by commas.]

[ohiowan]

Sept 30, 2013 20:54:53 GMT -5 @imback said:

Would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. So nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

It was so nice to meet you all! This Friday at P sounds great; I would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. E has mentioned S a few times and I'd like to invite him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I'd be happy to send the email, unless you'd rather send it. Let me know.

[kaybee85]

Sept 30, 2013 21:05:24 GMT -5 sonrisa said:

Sept 30, 2013 20:54:53 GMT -5 @imback said:

Would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. So nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

I would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. [your sentence lacks a subject for the verb "would love"]

So nice to meet you all. [This sentence fragment lacks a subject and a verb]

E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. [This sentence is long. You might consider breaking it down into two sentences. The multiple ands and ors makes it a bit hard to follow - ie. it looks like something I might write. lol.]

I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to, P, you could send it.

Wow, I totally misread this the first time and missed it!

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Sept 30, 2013 21:00:50 GMT -5 snipsnsnails said:

Sept 30, 2013 20:54:53 GMT -5 @imback said:

Would love to make Friday playdates a regular event. So nice to meet you all. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S a few times and I would like to extend an invitation for him and his nanny or mom to come to this week's playdate. I'm happy to send the email or if you'd like to P you could send it. Let me know.

It was so nice to meet you all. I'd love to start regular Friday playdates. This Friday at P sounds great. E has mentioned S before quite a few times. I'd love for him and his mom (or nanny) to come this Friday. I'm happy to send them an e-mail or if you'd like to send it, P, let me know.

Thank you too!  I went with your version with a slight modification to the second sentence.

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Sept 30, 2013 21:01:45 GMT -5 namasteak said:

Have you already had Friday play dates? I would wait until you have done a couple before suggesting it be a regular thing

I wasn't the one one who suggested it.  I'm actually the last to respond.  Too cool for school.

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Sent. Thanks for all the help.

Signed,
One slightly lost English/Psych grad

I am so burnt.

Never have children!